A little more abstract, so don't feel bad if you don't get it... that's just my confused self writing deeper feelings that make no sense :)
Wish for a song
Hope for the words
To rescue the lost
That wave behind you-
"So long"
Forms their lips
Wish for needle and thread,
And make me
Into a puppet
And I'll dance to the song-
"So long".
When you're lost.
Critique Welcome. Especially on this one.
3 comments:
This is wonderful! I especially love the second stanza. I don't have any critiques except for the line "Forms their lips" doesn't seem to flow as well as the rest.
I don't know if I "get" it, but I liked this one a lot.
Haha, I don't know that I quite 'get' it either :\
And thanks priya! I'll fix that :)
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