Saturday, August 29, 2009

On A Walk: Writing Exercise

in second person.

Critique Welcome!


If you've been on a walk with a sister who's prettier than you, you'll have committed to memory the looks on the faces of the hundreds, of the hundred thousands, of men you've passed on a walk like that. You'll have seen how they look at her. How their eyes drift down her toned, tanned legs, and you'll be torn between punching their nose, kicking their crotch, and running down another street to cry in self pity. If you've been on a walk with a sister who's prettier than you, you'll have chosen the latter. But if she's a good sister, a friend, she'll have searched and found you. She'll have looked away from those hundred thousand men, and pointed out the one geeky boy who looked at you.

And you'll both have laughed.

2 comments:

Priya said...

Haha, this is awesome! I love it.

sonix said...

Hey this is your brother :D I love your writing and if you ever need me to kick any boys crotches just let me know. I like your site and I put some of the stuff ive written on here, tell me what you think!

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